improve this sentence for me?
i looked up to see my master looming over my shoulder, holding a chain in her hand that she connected to me

(basically im trying to say that a chain is connected to my character's neck like a leash.)
first, let me teach you about filtering. it's the point of view character telling the reader what sense she used to experience what's happening, or that she used her brain to figure something out or remember something. not only does it add needless words, but it adds "psychic distance" between the reader and the character's experiences. you can look for the words that commonly filter: knew, thought, considered, regarded, wondered, noticed, was aware, sensed, felt, saw, hoped, realized, smelled, heard and it seemed, looked like, appeared, was obvious/apparent. decide on a case-by-case basis whether it's there to filter the point-of-view character's experience, and if it is, rewrite it.

so we'll start with getting rid of what the pov character used to determine what her master was doing. that leaves something like: my master loomed over my shoulder, holding a chain that connected to my collar. (or whatever there is to connect it to.)

is this sexual material? a master must be male, or present as male, and in a submissive character's point of view, the title is capitalized. a "female master" is generally a mistress, madam, domme, or similar title, also capitalized.

the reader needs to know more that what the pov character sees. if she feels the need to look up at her mistress, it's for a reason. did she feel new weight on a collar? hear chain clink? feel eyes on her? 

and last, get some feeling in there. how does the narrator react to being chained at the neck, both physically and emotionally?
i can only speak for myself about this but yes, i would want to brush up against her or put my arm around her. shoulders, head and arms i liked the clutch the sheets part. do you bite pillows too?maybe you should have voluntarily and gently but firmly pushed him up off of you and suggestively merely rolled onto your stomach and knees and give him a cheeky neck turn smile. maybe next time though in missionary or back to missionary... maybe you're legs weren't doing enough or maybe just dump the guy if he doesn't think much of you. i mean how insulting. you deserve better lady ,🙏 you can find a wretch on the upper right corner.

pin is what you are searching for. (banner will put the post above topic list. see gradle forum.) brief answer: shingles or nerve entrapment. detailed answer: hi. thanks for your query, albeit short and specific. to recapitulate: male/67 - currently overseas - returns to us tomorrow - severe pain in the are near left shoulder blade a few days ago - now subsided somewhat - severe bouts of... the nerves would be different for the hands and feet. see more... i think i got it.

thanks for your help richard. Forretress is based off of a bagworm, that is possibly inhabiting a discarded shell of some kind, and with she spikes on it's shell, it could also be based on mussels, shellfish, or a giant clam. Hope this helped! it looks like you are right, this appears to be an issue. i will make sure that it gets fixed soon. Critical captures are still in the game, I've had it happen for me several times.