then there is a strong possibility that you are missing the mark with your copy.
research your competition, and read how they are communicating with the audience, and that should give you some ideas. once you understand your audience, learn what frustrates your audience and how they communicate with each other.
next tip, every sentence you write should make a point and then end. be careful of run-on sentences and thoughts. be sure to make your point and then end your sentence.
be sure to structure your thoughts in an easy to follow a pattern, and try not to skip around. in your mind, you might think that you are being super creative, 