Who is the subject of 止まらない胸の歪を消しておくれよ


As part of my studies, I started to translate lyrics of songs I enjoy. It was
going well until I bumped with this phrase.

> 止まらない胸の歪を消しておくれよ

I'm think it translates somewhat to: "Late to erase the distortion of the
unstoppable chest"

Since Japanese a null subject language, the subject can be omitted and
asserted from the context right? On this phrase, there no indication
whatsoever who is talking or who is listening. I'd like know the subject of
this phrase and why is so.

Here is the lyric of the current song

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    止まらない胸の歪を消しておくれよ
    アメジスト
    すれ違ってく心
    君と僕の狭間で揺れる カケラ
    
    空っぽに堕ちてゆく夜を
    救っておくれよ アメジスト
    すれ違ってく 君と僕の
    染まる黒い闇を 透明な光で
    
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Thanks for your time :)




It's probably not "late to erase the distortion of the unstoppable chest" :-)

  1. It's 止まらない, not 止まれない.
  2. I think it's the 歪 which is 止まらない. In other words, 止まらない modifies the phrase 胸の歪.
  3. 〜ておくれよ is probably 〜てくれよ with the honorific お- added to くれる.

Here we have an imperative form of 〜てくれる, so it seems the speaker is asking
the listener to do something for them. So the listener is the (implicit)
subject of 消す, but with 〜てくれる there's no reason to put it explicitly into the
sentence.

I think that in both requests, the speaker is talking to Amethyst:

>   1. 止まらない胸の歪を消しておくれよ **アメジスト**
>   2. 救っておくれよ **アメジスト**
>

I can't come up with a literal translation that sounds right to me, so I'm
going to try a relatively free translation, replacing 歪 with "pain" and 消す
with "take away":

> Take away this endless pain in my heart, Amethyst

Amethyst is the listener, referred to elsewhere in the song as 君.

This translation isn't perfect--maybe someone could comment if they can think
of a way to improve it, particularly how to express 胸の歪. "Pain" isn't quite
right for 歪, but I don't think the literal "distortion" is totally
appropriate, either. Some dictionaries give "stress" or "strain" as possible
choices for the more psychological meaning, like in 心の歪.

But in any case, I think this should get you a little closer to the author's
intended meaning :-)




It's probably not "late to erase the distortion of the unstoppable chest" :-)

  1. It's 止まらない, not 止まれない.
  2. I think it's the 歪 which is 止まらない. In other words, 止まらない modifies the phrase 胸の歪.
  3. 〜ておくれよ is probably 〜てくれよ with the honorific お- added to くれる.

Here we have an imperative form of 〜てくれる, so it seems the speaker is asking
the listener to do something for them. So the listener is the (implicit)
subject of 消す, but with 〜てくれる there's no reason to put it explicitly into the
sentence.

I think that in both requests, the speaker is talking to Amethyst:

>   1. 止まらない胸の歪を消しておくれよ **アメジスト**
>   2. 救っておくれよ **アメジスト**
>

I can't come up with a literal translation that sounds right to me, so I'm
going to try a relatively free translation, replacing 歪 with "pain" and 消す
with "take away":

> Take away this endless pain in my heart, Amethyst

Amethyst is the listener, referred to elsewhere in the song as 君.

This translation isn't perfect--maybe someone could comment if they can think
of a way to improve it, particularly how to express 胸の歪. "Pain" isn't quite
right for 歪, but I don't think the literal "distortion" is totally
appropriate, either. Some dictionaries give "stress" or "strain" as possible
choices for the more psychological meaning, like in 心の歪.

But in any case, I think this should get you a little closer to the author's
intended meaning :-)

