Which particle(s) can be used to list nominalised verbs?


Here's the sentence I'm trying to express in Japanese. "I have changed my
life, I've become a cheerful person, all because of him!"

And this is how I would translate it. 僕の人生が変わったのや、明るい人になったのは、全部彼のおかげなんだ！

Am I using the right particles? My intuition says that the sentence is wrong.




> 「[僕]{ぼく}の[人生]{じんせい}が[変]{か}わったのや、[明]{あか}るい[人]{ひと}になったのは、[全部彼]{ぜんぶかれ}のおかげなんだ！」

is grammatical and even sounds fairly natural.

The only part that does not quite sound natural is 「明るい **人** 」. We would
rarely use 「人」 that way to refer to oneself, but again, it is still all
grammatical. You could say 「明るくなった」.

> Am I using the right particles?

Yes, you are. I would never call anything natural here when there is a
particle mistake.

The third-person pronoun 「彼」 is not something we native speakers use often,
but I certainly could not say it is wrong to use it.




> 「[僕]{ぼく}の[人生]{じんせい}が[変]{か}わったのや、[明]{あか}るい[人]{ひと}になったのは、[全部彼]{ぜんぶかれ}のおかげなんだ！」

is grammatical and even sounds fairly natural.

The only part that does not quite sound natural is 「明るい **人** 」. We would
rarely use 「人」 that way to refer to oneself, but again, it is still all
grammatical. You could say 「明るくなった」.

> Am I using the right particles?

Yes, you are. I would never call anything natural here when there is a
particle mistake.

The third-person pronoun 「彼」 is not something we native speakers use often,
but I certainly could not say it is wrong to use it.

