Which of these sentences is correct?


  * 外国人が日本語を話すのをは女々しい、日本人の女の子と言っていました.
  * 日本人の女の子は、外国人が日本語を話すのをは女々しいと言っていました.

I want to say this: "A japanese girl said that foreigners speak japanese
effeminate" (The girl that said this expression to me explain that foreigners
does not use to much the informal way of talking)




Neither is correct. First, you don't need を when it's topicalized with は. On
that ground, the first sentence is unclear how the part 外国人が日本語を話すのは女々しい (It's
wimpy for foreigners to speak Japanese) is involved into the rest
日本人の女の子と言っていた (someone said "a Japanese girl"). The second one has a problem
in the point that it looks as if it refers to Japanese girls in general. You
need some determinater like ある (a certain) for 日本人の女の子 or to express the
sentence as a Sentence of neutral description i.e. 日本人の女の子 **が** 外国人は日本語を 女っぽく
話す と言っていた.（←女っぽい）

