Need help with artwork


Good day all,

Thank you for reading my request. I am making a painting and want to make it
so that it makes sense to Japanese people. I am very interested in Japanese
culture but would not really know how to pronounce a sentence. I hope there is
some way to make it readable, without losing the design too much :)

The artwork is supposed to say: World Peace, which I found online to be 世界平和

I hope that is correct. I have added an image of what I am planning to make.
Any help would be greatly appreciated... Thank you in advance!

[![WP](https://i.stack.imgur.com/Y0Nmy.png)](https://i.stack.imgur.com/Y0Nmy.png)




[![WP](https://i.stack.imgur.com/Nln5X.png)](https://i.stack.imgur.com/Nln5X.png)

How about this? This may be easier to read.

