You actually have a sense of style, there are three different sections to that description  and you have, and there is actually some repetition involved  erm, by by starting each, by by this reference to the sight, the smell, the touch, and you have to, and and that's the kind of sty stylistic element that you have to incorporate into your version  and I put a note at the bottom too, that there are times when you can't totally update this kind of work.