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오프토픽을 유의해주세요 :)
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It is controversial which of the public businesses such as art, parks and public transit, the government should decrease its spending on. Although they are very important to public welfare, I believe that artistic area does not have to be invested more than the others for the following reasons: art facilities are not used frequently by many people and it takes lots of money.
To begin with, the rate of utilization by people is the least in an art business due to its low accessibility. This is because there are few art galleries and concert halls in a city and they are far from away to the central area of the city. In contrast, many people use nearby parks to refresh themselves and exercise. Also, many bus stations are located in crowded places. Therefore, spending money on art is not necessary to remain during the deficiency of taxes. (접근성이 떨어져서 -> 사람들이 이용하지 않기 때문에 -> 예술은 필요없다 라는 주장은 역으로 반대하면 사람들이 이용할 수 없어서 -> 돈을 더 써야한다 라는 주장으로 치환될 수 있습니다. 공고한 주장으로 보기 어렵습니다. 차라리 예술은 어렵다든지라는 식으로 접근하는 것이 좋습니다. 완전한 오프토픽이라고 보기는 어렵겠지만, 설득력 잇는 주장이라고는 보기 힘듭니다.) For example, there was a survey conducted by my city with nearly 1000 respondents. The purpose of the survey was to understand how frequently people use public facilities such as art galleries, buses, libraries, parks and so on. The majority of respondents replied that they rarely went to the art galleries not only because it is not fascinating but it is remoted to their dwelling sites.
On top of that, it is required to invest a significant amount of money. In order to attract many people, the government should borrow famous works of art in an exhibition or invite influential musicians at a concert, which needs substantial investment. However, it makes the fee increased, so many people will be likely to avoid visiting them, leading to a significant loss. For instance, my city announced that there would be an exhibition which displayed a famous artist's works, so many people anticipated it. However, the entrance fee was too expensive to be affordable by many people because the government charged considerable money to borrow them. Therefore, very few people visit there, and the government could not make a lot of profit through the gallery.
To sum up, it is not practical to invest art because many people are reluctant to using art facilities due to being distant from their living site. Also, it will cost enormous money to improve the quality of an the art business. Therefore, when the government should abate their use of taxes, it may be wise to lessen to spend on art.
오프토픽을 유의해주세요. 질문을 자의적으로 해석하거나, 질문에 일관된 주장을 하지 않거나, 주장간에 내용이 겹칠 경우 오프토픽의 위험성이 있습니다. 질문에 충실하게 일관된 주장을 해주세요. 수고하셨습니다 ^ㅇ^
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