   What's wrong with my profile?
  Hey folks.I'm pushing my name on a freelance site, and I need to know what parts of the below profile are turn offs, or what it's missing. Advertising myself is not my forte, and this is my first attempt to try and make any contribution to an industry. It is important I get some outside input.I am fully prepared for harsh criticisms, but please support your claims.This is in the first person only because I am advertising myself.Quote:How I can helpI specialize in programming with C++ on a Windows platform, particularly as it applies to games. I am also skilled in several forms of design, and all of the aforementioned talents are demonstrated in my portfolio. Please consider me if you need a flexible programmer or designer, as I will be thrilled to put forth my best efforts towards the following tasks:- Creating resources such as videos, sounds and artwork.- Programming solutions.- Designing projects, websites and other assets.- Educating students who can benefit from my knowledge.Why you need meI prioritize respect, communication, simplicity and quality when working. I insist on being certain of what it is I need to do, and ensuring everyone involved is aware of what we collectively are trying to accomplish. I also have several academic and professional accomplishments that are listed below.Experience overviewDue to my youth and fresh academic record, I am actively seeking to put my foot in the door of the gaming industry and expand my knowledge as far as I can. I have accumulated experience in outside fields such as building construction, marketing and educating. These experiences have only added to my integrity, since the broad background has given me outstanding problem solving capabilities and a rigid work ethic.EducationI am a Computer Science undergraduate that was awarded a scholarship by the Bagley College of Engineering. I am also recommended by several instructors and community figures in Georgia, Mississippi and even the United Kingdom.Work ExperienceBuckley & Klein LLPRelationship: EmployerResponsibilities: Data Entry; Internship; Odd jobs;Year(s) Worked: 2008-9Reason for Leaving: Temporary employment; No more work was available for my position.Larry Gerard IncorporatedRelationship: EmployerResponsibilities: Associate; Marketing; Data Entry; Design; Odd Jobs;Year(s) Worked: 2008-PresentPera Dance StudioRelationship: ClientResponsibilities: Marketing; Design;Year(s) Worked: 2008
  The only thing I see that really sticks out is instead of stating "Why you need me", say something like "What I can offer".  The best advice for any resume/profile is not to sound desperate or to hold yourself below any sort of standard such as stating that I'm new, etc.  Instead, go in with the confidence that any task at hand you, with the proper training, you'll be able to complete with quality :)   