   Designing Focused Games
 ArticleAuthor:  Bryan Ekman <me@bryanekman.com> Bryan Ekman on the forumsFogBugz Case Number: 19258Submission e-mail contents:Quote:Author: Bryan EkmanWebsite: www.bryanekman.comForum Name: Bryan Ekman
  Not on the ERB, but here's my opinions:1. Two grammar mistakes in the first sentence. Several other subject/plural agreement errors throughout. Some other spelling mistakes ("hurtles" instead of "hurdles"). Comma splices.2. I don't care about the exact dollar figures. 'Budget' is a-ok with me.3. "Consumer's", not "Consumers" mind.4. The "Idea" section sucks.5. It's sort of dry. He could probably sprinkle a joke in there. I got bored about halfway through his second page.So it's not that great, at least not for me. Needs some pretty drastic copy-editing and some humour.   