There were too many anachronistic terms that did not enter the language until decades after the events in this story, particularly in regard to the description of the ship's "facilities".  Also the basic premise of the story was simply too unbelievable.  A gentleman's daughter would never be allowed to travel without a female chaperon for even a few miles, crossing the sea would have been unthinkable.  The wholesale insertion of text from JA's novels into a sentence was a jarring note when syntax was ignored as it made the whole feel stilted and artificial.