Eventual Career Objective
The snippet doesn't state an objective. It's just a personal story about how you got into computers, but it doesn't say what you want to achieve (by pursuing an MS).

What you did when you were ten is unlikely to interest reviewers. Perhaps say "I've been interested in computers from a young age" but right now you're wasting a lot of characters on a lot of fluff. Perhaps you should leave this out entirely, unless how you got into computers from an early age is relevant to your current goals.

Also, try to narrow down your interests a bit. They're more likely to care about somebody who wants to passionately investigate a specific topic rather than someone who declares they're interested in just about everything. Again, consider leaving your interests out entirely unless they're relevant to your objective.