How to list adjectives in Chinese
I recognize at two 语病 in this sentence.

First, it should be


  周围的人都很羡慕他


People envy him, not her, his wife.

Second, one should not describe a person with 实惠，实惠 describes a product, which means the product is worth the price. To describe a person, one use 贤惠，and it is usually for a woman, which generally refers to a woman who is diligent, good tempered and etc.