Unfortunately the beginning was quite confusing? Who were these guys, what was their relationship to Bailey? Roommates? Brothers? Why is it so hard to add a clarifying sub-clause?
Again the classic mistake writing short novella. No real introduction, to description, and active-speech-plastered-behind-active staccato.

On the plus side, the narrative, Bailey's voice is refreshingly honest and funny. Quarter into the book I really enjoyed listening to her rambling thoughts and was curious if not a little impatient about what was going to happen next.
And, oh yeah, the sex, very, very nice. It rare to find authors who are able to bring this act to me like that, without having me make an distorted expression. Well done.

However, I am an enemy of time jumps, an short summaries. That is definitely the reason I'm not that into shorts, unless they are rather episodes and shorts. This one, luckily, didn't sting that bad, and I really enjoyed the story. Imagine my feeling of deceit, that it ended at 85%!
Unfortunately the beginning was quite confusing? Who were these guys, what was their relationship to Bailey? Roommates? Brothers? Why is it so hard to add a clarifying sub-clause? Again the classic mistake writing short novella. No real introduction, to description, and active-speech-plastered-behind-active staccato. On the plus side, the narrative, Bailey's voice is refreshingly honest and funny. Quarter into the book I really enjoyed listening to her rambling thoughts and was curious if not a little impatient about what was going to happen next. And, oh yeah, the sex, very, very nice. It rare to find authors who are able to bring this act to me like that, without having me make an distorted expression. Well done. However, I am an enemy of time jumps, an short summaries. That is definitely the reason I'm not that into shorts, unless they are rather episodes and shorts. This one, luckily, didn't sting that bad, and I really enjoyed the story. Imagine my feeling of deceit, that it ended at 85%!