Tag: Behind the Scenes
My latest flash fiction story, "The Prophet's Burden," is now available to read on Havok's website. And, since I'm a volunteer editor, there's no 24-hour time frame—it'll always be available, whether or not you're a Havok member. To celebrate its publication, here's a short look at how I wrote it.
If you've already read the story, you may have guessed that it follows the same exploits of the adventurer from "Sword of the Stones" or "The Tomb of the Ophidian Scepter." I'd been thinking of writing about another of his expeditions, and the "sixth sense" theme for October 2020 seemed like the perfect opportunity to do so.
So in a way, the "sixth sense" theme wasn't exactly the seed for this story, but it did help focus it. I thought it would be cool to feature an artifact that would allow the adventurer to sense the future—an extremely valuable skill for someone in his line of work! The idea was that the artifact would allow its wearer to discern the future as long as they were wearing it in that possible future. I wanted removing the artifact to feel particularly weighty, because that is the only course of action that can't be predicted.
The madness element of the talisman (since that was the type of artifact I settled on), evolved naturally as I wrote the story. It made sense that trying to comprehend a multitude of experiences all at once would be overwhelming. I didn't quite have the word count to delve into this aspect, but I envisioned the talisman grants/forces its wearer to experience the future in all five senses. So you don't just see what happens; you feel, hear, smell, and (sure) taste it, too. So the adventurer's brain was telling him that he was being stabbed, crushed, eaten, hearing his partner scream and animals roar, smelling burning flesh, tasting noxious gases, etc. all at once. Not a very pleasant experience!
I don't really go into that in the story though. What was interesting was composing scenes from the main character's future-perspective while considering what was actually going on in real-time. I wanted to give readers the option to re-read the story and understand what Alma was seeing/hearing. For example, the first "real" dialogue after the adventurer puts on the talisman is him answering Alma's as-yet unasked question, which is why she just stares at him for a moment. It was a unique challenge, but I think I pulled it off.
In terms of the actual writing, the first draft started right with the adventurer putting on the talisman. Herein lies a tip for writing flash fiction. The story really picks up when the main character puts the talisman, but that moment doesn't offer any backstory to help ground readers. Nevertheless, I wrote that scene first because I knew I would need to get to it quickly.
Later, after writing the majority of the story, I went back to write the intro. This offered several benefits: 1) I knew how many words were left to write the opening and keep the story under 1,000 words. 2) I was already in the writing groove, so instead of spending a few paragraphs warming up my "writing voice," I was able to jump right in. And 3) I knew what moment I was writing toward, so I knew which information had to be relayed, and which stuff could be left out. The resulting "opening" section lasts approximately 120 words, but it moves toward the inciting incident pretty quickly (compared to what I would have likely done without the constraint).
Because the crux of the story always lay in the scene where the characters finally grasp the talisman's power, I knew the ending would have to be similarly fast-paced. I wanted to include another scene showing the different futures that could result from an encounter with an enormous crocodile, but the word count just wasn't there.
Since I didn't have the space to describe this scene going into further detail about the artifact's effects on the wearer, I opted for a broader overview as the adventurers exit the temple. Even though I think it could have been interesting to dive into this aspect, I think the end result fits well with the main character's inability to focus.
The ending was a little tricky. As I mentioned above, taking off the talisman was meant to be a significant gesture and indicate that the adventurer could accept not knowing the future. But since this story felt a little heavier than other installments, I wanted to reintroduce just a little levity at the end. My first draft had the main character commenting about what drew the ancient civilization mad (an idea that didn't make it into the final story). However, my editor Lisa encouraged me to push this a little more. I'm happy she did, because the end result gives the characters a little more good-natured banter. And adding banter is always a good call.
Of course, you're invited to add a little banter here in the comments or over on the story itself! I hope you enjoyed this glimpse into how "The Prophet's Burden" came together. Thank you for reading!
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Today's the launch day for Bingeworthy: Havok Season Three! My newest flash fiction story, "In Search of the Magma Heart" is available exclusively in this collection, so I wanted to share a brief post about how it came together.
As a volunteer for Havok, I had the option to write a story for the anthology as long as it matched one of the season's themes. The "Bingeworthy" season themes were all based on story tropes like Dynamic Duos and Answering the Call. I thought it would be fun to try to pack as many as possible into one story, but ultimately submitted it under the One Thing theme.
And having fun with the story was really the driving idea. Even though I wasn't planning on submitting to Havok's Wacky Wednesday genre, I wanted to write something that would make me and readers laugh. When I wrote the first draft of this story, it had been quite a while since I had finished a fiction project. So my goal was just to enjoy the process, and that meant a heavy dose of humor.
That meant starting with developing a funny premise. As I brainstormed, I thought it would be fun to focus on a reluctant hero—who makes no attempt to hide said reluctance. I also decided to create another character so the two of them could banter on their adventure, but it also worked to make her the one who invited him along in the first place.
Of course, the funniest thing that can happen to a reluctant hero is drawing them even deeper into the quest they want to escape. So from the very beginning of plotting, I wanted something to happen to the main character that would keep him from going back. If you've read the story, you know this definitely happens.
With this goal/ending in mind, writing the story was a matter of maintaining forward movement while sprinkling in bits of humor. I may have mentioned this in previous posts, but I think one of the best sources of comedy in fantasy is juxtaposing fantastic elements with more modern/mundane sensibilities. This is why one character is named Maelys (a real, albeit uncommon name) and the other is named Tom (which you may know a few of).
I think the most prominent example of this occurs in the first two paragraphs. The first paragraph is supposed to read like an epic, action-packed opening promising a heroic fantasy story. Then the story "cuts" to her friend panicking on a rock surrounded by lava. I think the gambit pays off, giving readers an idea of what to expect for the rest of the story.
Of course, by design, that juxtaposition gets somewhat inverted at the end. (Spoilers ahead.) I tried to write Tom's rock collecting as another bit of comedy—kind of a jokey side note explaining why he agreed to this adventure in the first place. But at the very end, that hobby has a very serious ramification. As I wrote the story, I tried to balance the humor with foreshadowing, and I think the final version leans slightly toward the latter. It'll be interesting to hear how readers react to the story, and whether they paid special attention to the rock collecting at the beginning or if they thought it was just a funny anecdote.
Regarding the ending, when I was writing the first draft of the story, I tried to fit in a little more action to amp up the climax. In this early version, the cavern was home to a serpent that attacked the duo when Tom grabbed the wrong gem. Maelys battled the guardian while Tom ran around being useless. It was a funny idea, but it also would've used up a lot of words.
I knew that if I wanted to show this scene, I'd need to trim the tunnel scene. But that walk through the darkness had so much good humor and banter (even more so in the first draft), that I didn't have the heart to trim it. In my opinion, those elements matched the heart of the story more than a big fight (even if said fight did include one character running around). I was willing to sacrifice the action, but I like to think that there's an alternate timeline with a >1000 word story that has both bits.
But since we can't currently access that timeline, I thought it might be fun to share a deleted scene of sorts. When I realized the fight would take too many words, I tried trimming the serpent's part down to a very brief appearance. This section was still too long, so I cut the snake entirely, unceremoniously sentencing it to a forgotten draft on my computer. Until now.
Tom nodded. "Alright, cool. So we just pick the right one of these orbs and you can be on your merry old quest."
"I guess so."
"Great." Tom strode toward the closest gem, arm outstretched. "Now we just need to figure out which one it is."
Maelys started saying, "I wouldn—"
Tom grabbed the gem, and a hissing sound reverberated through the cavern.
The teenagers locked eyes then looked up. An enormous, ebony snake slithered between stalactites.
"You are kidding me!" screamed Tom.
The snake launched itself at the boy before finding itself suddenly impaled by Maelys's spear. It thudded to the ground, then shot the swordmaiden an indignant look before crumbling to dust.
With that, I'll conclude this behind the scenes look at "In Search of the Magma Heart!" You can find it and 45 other great flash fiction stories in Bingeworthy: Havok Season Three, available now. Thank you for reading!
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Woohoo! My newest flash fiction story, "Salty," is available to read for 24 hours on Havok today. It's a fantasy-comedy about a mermaid whose sunbathing sesh is rudely interrupted by a lovestruck human guy. Curious about how I wrote it? You've come to the right place.
This was the first story I wrote for Havok's new season, "Stories that Sing." Every month features stories inspired by songs from a different decade — in this case, the 1950s.
I'm not familiar with many 1950s songs. Fortunately, my wife owns a soundtrack from a show that features a ton of songs from that decade. So we listened to it on a roadtrip, and I started imagining which stories would lend themselves to a flash fiction piece. As you may imagine, a lot of them are love songs. And since Havok features genre stories, I knew there needed to be some sort of sci-fi/fantasy element.
Which made "I'm Gonna Wash That Man Right Outa My Hair" so intriguing. The mental image of washing conjured images of water—which led to the sea—which led to a mermaid—boom. A story of a mermaid spurning a human guy's advances to avoid an inter-species romance. In terms of genre, it seemed like a great candidate for a Wacky Wednesday story.
The next day, I sat down to write. But just to double-check on the decade, I googled "I'm Gonna Wash That Man Right Outa My Hair" . . . and learned it was recorded in 1949! Travesty!
Fortunately, there were plenty of other songs on the soundtrack. I figured I'd already committed myself to this story idea (and the deadline was literally the following day) so I identified a different song that would lend itself to the same story.
Ah yes, speaking of "the deadline was literally the following day," I'm rather proud to say that I wrote this story in a day. This was the "sit in a coffee shop all day" day of our roadtrip, and I'd say I put it to good use! Starting with only the premise and genre, I sat down and starting pantsing (read: writing without an outline).
I knew the story would start with the guy encountering the mermaid, but I had no idea where it would go or end up. At first, I thought it would begin with her saving him from a shipwreck, but I found the setup for that wasn't leading to a very interesting conversation. I started over, this time with him interrupting her sunbathing. The interruption made it feel like a much more humorous start (as opposed to, you know, saving someone from dying).
From there, it was just a matter of imagining what would make for a funny conversation. The list of challenges of an inter-species romance was an early idea, but bringing Cthulhu in as a deterrent was something I came up with in the moment. Every now and then, things would veer into territory that would considerably exceed the word count or just start leading the conversation off-track, so it was just a matter of reigning things in and keeping dialogue focused on what they wanted (a date, and space).
All in all, the actual writing portion took me approximately a full afternoon. (I'm very impressed with flash fiction authors who write stories in an hour!) Both my wife and I did a read-through before I submitted, but that was pretty much the extent of my revisions. So I'm very thankful for Lauren and Gen at Havok for seeing through its imperfections and helping it become what you can read today!
I hope you enjoyed both the story and this look at how I wrote it! If you did, or if you have any questions, feel free to post here or on Havok's website. And if you didn't get a chance to read it during the 24 hours it was free, you can always become a Havok Horde member. As a member, you'll get full access to "Salty" and every other story they've published, as well as the ability to vote on which stories are selected for anthologies. Thanks for reading!
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Behind the Scenes of "The Tomb of the Ophidian Scepter"
Hooray! My newest flash fiction story, "The Tomb of the Ophidian Scepter," is available to read for 24 hours on Havok today. It's based on classic adventure, Indiana Jones-type stories of powerful artifacts, supernatural guardians, and lots of action. If you've already read it and want to know a little about how it came to be, this post is for you!
Like my previous two stories for Havok, this one was written specifically for this month's theme—in this case, recover. From the beginning of brainstorming, I knew I wanted to interpret this in terms of recovering a treasure. And fortunately, I had already written a story in a similar vein last year to provide inspiration … and maybe a few other elements.
That other story was "Sword of the Stones," which was published in Havok's "Extraordinary Exploits" issue in April 2018. You can read more about writing that in this post, and many of the elements mentioned there were repeated in writing "The Tomb of the Ophidian Scepter." In addition, I thought it would be fun to feature the same main character on a new mission in a different location.
"Sword of the Stones" takes place in a ruined cathedral, which felt like it would be a European location. Wanting "Ophidian Scepter" to take place in a different region, I settled on the Middle East. (As I understand it, the type of mummification the story references is pretty specific to Egypt, but I don't want to commit the story to taking place anywhere particular in the region.) This choice, in turn, influenced the majority of the new elements (setting, guardian, partner, and artifact, in that order).
By setting, I basically mean the idea to set the story in a tomb. Originally, I considered a story with a lot of exploration. But since I still wanted to have a battle as well as the search for an artifact, I figured those two elements would use much of the word count. That meant the tomb would likely be a large chamber. Thankfully, Havok editor Cathy Hinkle pointed out that the environment could use a little more description, so the final product is a little easier (and more interesting!) to visualize.
As for the guardian, a mummy seemed like the natural choice for a tomb in the desert. But since undead mummies are no strangers to this type of story, I wanted to make it a little more intimidating. That's how the sickles grafted on in place of hands came into play. A cut line actually referenced that the main character's impatience is the only reason the mummy was activated to protect the scepter.
Changing the main character's partner was another nod to Indiana Jones and The Librarian, but I also like the idea of different regions having specialists researching arcane artifacts and tracking down their resting places. In fact, the idea to name her Miriam was less of a nod to Marion in Raiders of the Lost Ark, and more from wanting her to have a name originally from the same region (Miriam is a Hebrew name). Since I was working with a higher word count than I aimed for in "Sword of the Stones," I wanted her to have more of an active role in this story—and I'd say that worked out
Regarding the artifact, brainstorming powers was more of a challenge at the beginning because I didn't think it would necessarily be used in the story—I wanted to focus more on the recovery than the treasure itself. That said, I did think it would be fun to name it using an uncommon word. "Ophidian" is one that I've learned (and retained) recently. And (in case you didn't know or haven't looked it up yet), it basically means snakelike. That idea leant itself to being paired with a scepter, which matches very nicely with the Rod of Asclepius—instrument of the Greek deity and modern-day symbol of medicine. With that connection made, it only seemed right for the artifact to convey supernatural healing powers. Just goes to show what a difference the right name can make!
After that, the story started to fall into place. I had a loose outline of the main beats (fight, trapdoor, retrieve scepter, fight part 2), and started writing based on that. As I wrote, I realized that the scepter might actually be an effective weapon against the mummy. On one hand, it would restore the monster's hands. But it could also mess with the magic-mummification that allowed the mummy to fight in the first place.
That meant thinking through how the scepter would work—even if I didn't have room to explain it in the story itself. So if that question was bugging you at the end of the story, you've come to the right place. The scepter heals any wound, basically restoring tissue/organs/whatever is damaged through magic (the magic itself I can't explain—roll with it). The mummy is animated by magic, which not only allows it to live, but also retain a connection with the organs that have been preserved (stomach, liver, lungs, and intestines in Egyptian mummification). The brain's been ripped out, but the magic that enables it to be the scepter's guardian takes care of movement. When the scepter touches the mummy, it starts superseding the magic that keeps the mummy animated. This heals the mummy's wounds, which is why the sickles fall away and its hands regenerate, but it can't physically take the preserved organs (enchanted to stay in the same condition as the mummy for millennia) and put them back in the mummy's body. The mummy effectively turns into a couple-thousand-year-old person missing certain guts, which is why it keels over.
And that pleasant image is likely the best way to end this behind-the-scenes look. If you enjoyed the story or have any more questions, feel free to comment here or on the post on Havok's website. If you're reading this after the story's 24 hours have passed, you can always become a member and get full access to every flash fiction story they've published, plus the ability to vote on which stories are selected for their anthologies! As always, thank you for reading!
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Behind the Scenes of "Transmutation"
Yay! My latest flash fiction story "Transmutation" is available to read for FREE only today on Havok's website. It's a short fantasy-mystery about an eccentric alchemist using her skills to shorten her dungeon sentence. If you've already finished it, here's a little background on how I wrote it. (And if you haven't read it yet and it's any day after April 1, 2019, you can become a member for a very small fee to get access to it and all of Havok's other stories!)
Similarly to "When Magic Died," this story was written specifically for this month's theme (reform) and the day's genre (mystery). I had been thinking about incorporating alchemy for one of Havok's earlier themes (recycle), but that ended up going nowhere. I decided to revisit the idea since one of medieval alchemy's goals was to transform things into other things. But since I wasn't sure if that would be a strong enough connection to "reform," I also wanted to try to have a character change their ways. But I still wasn't sure where the mystery element came in.
I thought about that part for a while. I didn't feel confident trying to put all the mystery tropes in a flash fiction piece—I just wanted to treat it as the moment where a key clue is revealed. But how would it all tie together
I'm not ashamed to say it all fell in place while I was waking up one morning (get your sleep, kids!). Since a big part of medieval alchemy was trying to turn common metals into gold, I decided to use that to give the main character a criminal history. They would be imprisoned for using alchemy to pass their own gold off as official currency, but then called on to help solve a case involving alchemy of a far more nefarious sort.
I knew this backstory wouldn't be a big part of the actual story's plot (the reason for Ryla's imprisonment/im-dungeonment only gets a passing reference), but I felt it did offer a starting point for the character to reform. I had a loose idea of the alchemist character uncovering a criminal plot to deconstruct … everything …. to rebuild it a new way. With this rough idea settled on, I felt like I had enough to start writing.
Up until this point, I hadn't thought much about the alchemist's character. I decided to make her a woman because I was really concerned about the story turning into an all boys' club. (As it turned out, the other two, less interesting characters were both male, so I'd say this was the right choice.) But I also wanted to give her a unique personality to both a) clash with the more "professional" guardsmen/pseudo-detectives and b) bring a little more life into this search for clues.
I settled on a Jack Sparrow-type characterization, which mostly manifests in her dialogue. At first you don't quite get her, but if you watch long enough, you see that her unpredictable attitude and esoteric plans do have a purpose. In my head, years of alchemy have left their mark on her, due to her experiments strengthening her connections to the core elements, but also driving her slightly insane and causing her to disassociate from the real world. It's kind of the same way that hatmakers were affected by working with mercury, leading to the phrase "mad as a hatter." … In fact, mercury was one of the elements that medieval alchemists often worked with. It's all connected!)
With Ryla being brought to a investigation already underway, I needed to come up with a way for her to use alchemy to reveal a clue that the guards would have missed. And for the sake of word count, I needed it to be somewhat simple. This led me to lean into alchemy from the angle of the four elements, which is what fantasy typically focuses on when it introduces the subject.
This is how I came up with the idea of placing each of the elements at the corner of a page to reveal hidden writing. (Not mentioned in the story: every manuscript designed this way is treated to be fireproof, waterproof, and rot-proof—but other than that, they're quite destructible!) I've never seen/read this done in stories related to alchemy before, so it seemed like a plausible "a-ha!" moment for the reader. But if you have seen it done, please let me know in the comments!
For better or worse, the segment of revealing the secret writing ended up using more words than I expected, which meant the first draft of this rushed to a) reveal what the mystery alchemist is up to and b) demonstrate Ryla's reformation. In the rush, the story almost shifted to Desail as the main character, focusing on him becoming overwhelmed with learning about alchemy's power and asking Ryla to help track the mystery alchemist down.
Ryla had a great line in this version after Desail asked her to help: "Is that even a question? Yes I'll help you catch this loon and quite possibly save the world. I may be a fraudster, but I'm no sadist." Classic Ryla. But the ending overall could be stronger, as editor Lisa Godfrees rightly pointed out in her feedback. She identified that the story needed to be more about what the mystery alchemist was up to, or Ryla's reformation. With the word count, it'd be hard to do both.
Since the segment with the elements and manuscript took a good chunk of the word count, I concluded that the story was more about the mystery alchemist's intentions than Ryla. So—in an effort to build tension—I shifted things around and had Ryla take longer to figure out exactly what the other alchemist was up to. I like to think there's still an undercurrent of her reformation in the final story. But even if it's not there, there's still the reformation of the whole world to worry about!
Have any questions or comments about "Transmutation," how it came together, or alchemy? Feel free to post below right here, or under the story on Havok's website. And make sure you keep following them on social media or become a member for even more awesome flash fiction stories. Thanks for reading!
Categories: Stories, Writing Craft Tags: Alchemist, Alchemy, Backstory, Behind the Scenes, Elements, Fantasy, Flash Fiction, Havok, Jack Sparrow, Mystery, Mystery Monday, Prisoner, Ryla, Transmutation, Writing Strategies Leave a comment
Behind the Scenes of "Special Delivery"
As you may have seen, my latest story was published in this month's issue of Splickety. And to follow up, I wanted to share a brief behind the scenes look at how "Special Delivery" came together.
Like other stories for Splickety, this one started with a theme, which was "Christmas abroad." I personally have always been in the U.S. at Christmastime, so drawing inspiration from real life was out. I did want to make sure there was some type of conflict in the course of the story, but without much familiarity with other countries' Christmas customs, I wasn't sure what to work with. Fortunately, I do have experience with an obstacle that can easily be translated anywhere else in the world: running late for a flight.
Splickety emphasizing YA in its imprint this year, combined with the abroad theme, meshed perfectly in the idea of a couple students returning from a semester abroad. In this respect, the story was loosely inspired by real life, since I also gave my brother a Venetian mask after visiting Italy in college. It was also convenient that the different language offered an easy way to incite action (by realizing that the book wasn't in English).
One area of inaccuracy probably lies in how I portray the airport. I spent … an unreasonable amount of time trying to figure out what shops exist in the Leonardo Da Vinci airport. And my story probably makes it sound a lot bigger than it actually is (as near as I can tell, it just has three terminals). And I really doubt that there are souvenir carts with Venetian masks in the terminal. And I can't even say that they sell Venetian carnival masks anywhere besides … Venice. BUT all of that seemed more believable than the idea that anyone would leave the airport to find a gift that close to their plane leaving.
In fact, the first draft of this story gave the guys way too much time to get back to their plane. At first, I was concerned about keeping things realistic. But as I read through, I realized that the realism was detracting from the tension. So I kept scaling back the time they had to get back to their gate. Ideally, you shouldn't have to choose between realism and tension. But if you do, always go with tension. Maybe Nathan's just really bad with time management.
Regarding the end of the story, I think this is the first time I've had a total scene break in a flash fiction piece. I toyed with introducing the mask in the airport and ending the story there, but I think it works better as it's being opened on Christmas day. This also helped address the issue that the bulk of the story doesn't have that much to do with Christmas (other than the conceit of looking for a gift). Overall, I think the scene break worked, though I think it's best to avoid them when possible if a story is less than 1000 words.
Overall, "Special Delivery" was another great writing exercise. It felt quite normal to be writing a Christmas story in August/September, because I'm doing the same stuff at work, haha. If you're interested in reading it in a collection of fun, short Christmas stories to celebrate the season, make sure you get your copy (of the last issue) of Splickety today!
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Behind the Scenes of "Road Tripping"
As you may have already seen, I had another story published in Splickety this month! This month's theme is senioritis, so I wrote a story about a graduating senior whose plan to go road tripping with his friends nearly derails … before an unexpected ally steps in to save the day. If you haven't read it yet, make sure you do before reading the rest of this post!
I should begin by saying this story was not inspired by any personal experience of either making or missing a road trip after graduation.The theme's prompt specifically mentioned pranks, proms, and college applications, but I wanted to try to come up with a concept different than those situations. I can't trace the road trip idea to anything in particular, but I think High School Musical 3—and specifically Troy Bolton's car troubles—were a subconscious but significant influence.
And therein lay my first challenge: Coming up with a car problem that would genuinely jeopardize road trip plans, but could also be solved relatively quickly. This issue would also need to cost a significant amount of money that a teenager could realistically have saved up. (I have no idea how much teenagers make/save these days.) This is a very specific problem.
So I found myself trying to identify a specific car problem that I didn't have. Usually, people know what the issue is and they want to find out how much it cost and how easy it is. I was doing the reverse. After many google searches about common car issues and estimates, I eventually landed on having a tire blow out. Even though replacing one tire would average about $150, I figured the parents insisting on replacing all of them would be a good way to drive that up.
In terms of plot, I knew from the beginning that I wanted the main character's younger brother to save the day. My relationship with my own younger brother was a very loose influence. The element that I wanted to highlight how even emotions like annoyance have an undercurrent of familial love. I think I achieved this better with the younger brother, particularly in his reactions to the older brother's cluelessness. The line "Just trying to be nice, you moron" is probably my best sentence to date. Classic.
But seriously. Even while I was writing the story, I knew the main character had a couple things working against him. He wasn't very sympathetic, and he wasn't proactive at all. In any other situation, I would have modified the story to focus on the younger brother. He has those in spades. But since the theme was senior year, I felt a need to tell the story from the older brother's perspective.
Part of this is because the first version of this story ended very differently. After the younger brother (Chad) offered to pay for the tires, the older brother (Daniel) said it was might be his best graduation present. They went down the stairs, with Chad calling out that he figured out Daniel's graduation gift.
This was the story I submitted, though I knew it could still be stronger. I'm super grateful that editor Lauren Hildebrand enjoyed the story, but had the same sentiment. She reinforced my feelings that Daniel doesn't have much of an arc, but also shared that she thought Chad would've liked to go on the trip. She made other solid comments about fleshing out the friends and how to treat dialogue, but her comments on the ending stuck with me the most.
I wrestled with it for a while. Maybe I was identifying way too closely with Daniel, but I didn't think it would make sense for Chad to join the three boys on the trip they'd been planning for years. As I was thinking through this—trying to figure out how to get Daniel to offer but Chad not go—I eventually had another thought: Why not plan two road trips?
I'm a little embarrassed of how long it took me to come up with that, but I got there eventually. And I think the end result is appropriately sweet without negating the occasionally-tense brother-brother relationship. I made those changes as well as others, and that version is what you can read today.
One final note about the texting conversation. I'm not a big texter, but I'm pretty happy with how I feel I captured a text conversation between digital natives would go. When I submitted, I thought about keeping Alex's and Ian's texts lined up on the left, but lining up Daniel's on the right to mirror how it would look on a phone screen, like so:
D: Bad news. Parents say all tires need to be replaced
A: Dang man. How much?
D: 600
A: Whoa
I: WAT
In the end, I stuck to the submission guidelines and kept everything aligned on the left. It may have worked with the initials like you see above. But with the nicknames (which … I did not know you could do in text conversations), I think they're easier to track just left aligned. Maybe one day I'll experiment with a text conversation that uses this format.
That concludes my behind the scenes look at "Road Tripping!" I hope you enjoyed both the story and learning how it came together. If you have any other questions about its creation, feel free to ask them below 🙂 Thanks for reading!
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Behind the Scenes of "The Birthday Party"
In case you haven't seen the latest news, I had another flash fiction piece published this month. It's called "The Birthday Party," is available in print/digital and on Kindle, and is my first published romance story. And this is a brief glimpse at how it came to be.
As with all of my stories submitted to Splickety, it started with their theme for the month. Specifically "The 'Aww' Factor" for their Spark (romance) imprint. This prompt asked writers to incorporate animals or kids into a romance story—and make it really sweet.
When I started brainstorming, I thought people would be more likely to use animals in their stories, so I decided to try to involve kids (if you check out the issue, you'll see it turned out to be a 50/50 split). Trying to come up with scenarios that would put a kid and single adult in the same situation eluded me for a while. The college student attending a cousin's birthday party angle eventually came to me, but my original story had a lot more setup explaining just how reluctantly she came to the party.
With the family relationship established between Julie and Emma, I still needed to come up with a reason for the love interest to attend. Obviously, he couldn't also be family. Even if he was friend of the family, I thought it would be a stretch for a non-related college student to come to a eight-year-old's birthday party. I wasn't sure about going the teacher route because I thought a lot of submissions with kids would use that angle, so I think him technically just being an education major rather than a fully-fledged teacher helped him stand out.
As for the plot, I originally thought the story would be mostly conversation-driven. I expected to have them talk about college, flirt a little, and eventually decide to go out. But when I finally reached the point of them actually meeting, I looked at my word count and thought Um, I don't have enough space for that.
So I introduced the water fight as a way for a lot to "happen" without having to describe it all. Even with this, it clocked in significantly over the 700 words I usually shoot for. I looked for places to cut, but figured that any cuts would just make the storytelling cut corners. The water fight went through a few iterations before landing on the idea that Julie really wasn't that jazzed about it, but saw it as a chance to spend more time with Tim.
Writing a satisfying ending was rough, but I'm ultimately happy with how it turned out. Previous submissions to Spark had impressed on me the importance of feeling like the relationship would head somewhere after the story ended. But I also wasn't sure if an hour hanging out at a kid's birthday party would realistically feel like a good occasion to ask someone out. Both because of this uncertainty and word restraints, I decided to leave things with a brief, flirty exchange predicated on the time spent with the kids.
Of course, I couldn't talk about behind the scenes of this story without mentioning editor Leslie McKee. Her comments helped me better understand what readers expect from flash fiction romance—for example, peppering hints of interest throughout the story, and not just toward the end. I was really thankful to have her direction in polishing the story up before publication.
And that's how I wrote "The Birthday Party!" I hope you liked this glimpse behind the scenes of how it came together. Any other questions on this little romance story? Feel free to drop them in the comments.
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Behind the Scenes of "Mr. Nilssen's Kjempehytte"
Last week, The Norwegian American published my short story "Mr. Nilssen's Kjempehytte." If you haven't read it yet, head on over to their website and take a look before reading on about how it came to be.
Unlike my previous stories, "Mr. Nilssen's Kjempehytte" didn't need to match a particular theme. That said, their submission guidelines do say they consider stories of any genre as long as they relate to Norway, or crime/mystery stories (even without Norwegian elements). I decided to hedge my bets with a mystery set in Norway.
For me, the biggest challenge of this was fitting a mystery into 1000 words. When I think of mysteries, I think of crime scenes, clues, witnesses, red herrings, and elaborate explanations revealed at the end. Which would not work as flash fiction. So I had to be very intentional about the story's structure.
The final result essentially splices together key snippets of the "mystery"—surveying the evidence, collecting clues, piecing them together, etc. Because of this, the story is able to span a much longer timeframe than any of my previous stories. (Up until this one, my stories' timelines have typically been a few minutes from beginning to end. "Mr. Nilssen's Kjempehytte" spans a few hours.) Even re-reading it now, I'm pleased with how it turned out and kind of surprised at how it works as flash fiction even though it takes so long, timewise.
In terms of plot, I knew I wanted to include a troll even before finalizing the mystery itself. I'm a fantasy writer at heart, and Norwegian folklore is full of recognizable creatures and characters. Originally, I thought I might have the main character come into contact with the trolls (loosely foreshadowed by Berit's remark about playing with their kids). Unfortunately, as the remaining word count grew slim, I realized I wouldn't be able to do that scene justice. I'm not sure how many people will read the actual ending as an ambiguous one, but in my head, that troll is totally real.
The hard part was getting to it. While brainstorming ideas for evidence that could incite a mystery, I thought trolls might take issue with people mistreating land. Hence the destroyed backhoe. This ended up working both ways, as it also provided a reason for the absence of trash around the construction site. Just goes to show that when you don't know how to move forward, sometimes you just need to look backward.
The names throughout the story are courtesy of a pre-reader with far more exposure to Norwegian culture than I have. Nilsson is a common Norwegian surname, and Berit is a common girl's name. "Morfar," if you caught it while reading, is the word for a maternal grandfather. On Google Maps, the region around Åmot looked like it had a good amount of forest and mountains, but I learned in the course of writing this that Norway is known considerably more for the latter than the former. The original title was "Trowhoyde" (a variation on the word "troll" and the Norwegian word for "hill," but my editor suggested "Mr. Nilssen's Kjempehytte" and I liked the sound of it. (As mentioned last week, "kjempehytte" loosely translates to cabin fight).
And that's a little insight into how I wrote "Mr. Nilssen's Kjempehytte!" I hope you enjoyed both the story and this little glimpse behind the scenes. Have any questions about it that I didn't address here? Feel free to ask in the comments. Takk!
Categories: Writing Craft Tags: Behind the Scenes, Flash Fiction, Mr. Nilssen's Kjempehytte, Mystery, Norway, Norwegian, Norwegian Culture, Norwegian Folklore, The Norwegian American, Trolls Leave a comment