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David McGillivray's pitch for a new and sexually shocking Maugham feature film
My previous blog here was about writer-producer-hyphenate David McGillivray's upcoming autobiography Little Did You Know.
At the end, he mentioned that he had optioned movie rights to Robin Maugham's scandalous novel The Wrong People, which he is pitching to prospective financiers.
Non-producers/financiers seldom see actual pitches. They only see the finished product if it ever gets made.
So I thought it would be interesting to print the text – with his permission – of McG's sales pitch for The Wrong People. Here it is. The photos in the pitch were taken in the 1970s by actor Sal Mineo.
SECRETLY PUBLISHED
FORGOTTEN FOR MORE THAN 40 YEARS
ROBIN MAUGHAM'S SCANDALOUS NOVEL
IS ABOUT TO SHOCK A NEW GENERATION
From award-winners David McGillivray and Peccadillo Pictures
Robin Maugham's
THE WRONG PEOPLE
Set in the UK and Morocco in 1967, The Wrong People follows the torments of English schoolmaster Arnold Turner, who has the misfortune while on holiday in Tangier to be seduced into the dangerous world of Clarence Baird. A rich and unscrupulous expatriate, Baird entraps Turner into bringing him one of his most troubled pupils, Dan Gedge, so that he can be groomed. The monstrous plan, involving a dead-of-night kidnapping and a secret passage to Marseille, has a shockingly unexpected conclusion
Robert Cecil Romer Maugham, 2nd Viscount Maugham, and author of The Servant, took the advice of his famous uncle Somerset when he wrote The Wrong People.
The book's theme – a sexual predator living in Morocco tries to persuade an English schoolmaster to procure him a boy he can groom – was too shocking even for the "swinging" Sixties. Maugham published the book under a pseudonym. But the revised 1970 edition, under his own name, was well received. "Grippingly told," said the Sunday Times. "A gripping thriller," agreed the Sunday Express.
The book was discovered by former Hollywood star Sal Mineo, the kid who adored James Dean in Rebel without a Cause. Mineo wanted to direct his first feature and in 1971 came to London with his partner Courtney Burr to begin pre-production. Nobody wanted to be associated with this hot property.
A succession of writers, among them Peter Shaffer, David Sherwin and Edna O'Brien refused to write the screenplay. Actors including Martin Potter, Leonard Whiting and John Moulder-Brown wouldn't even meet Mineo. Eventually, a script was written by Murray Smith, known for cheap exploitation pictures made for independent producer-director Pete Walker. Mineo went to Morocco to scout locations. But the authorities wouldn't allow him to film there. Mineo returned to the US without a deal in 1974.
Two years later he was stabbed to death.
40 years later writer-producer David McGillivray read a new biography of Sal Mineo, which includes a long chapter on The Wrong People. McGillivray had been aware of Mineo's attempts to film the book since 1973 when, like Murray Smith, he worked for Pete Walker. McGillivray's screenplays for Walker include the cult classics House of Whipcord and Frightmare. Later, McGillivray produced a gay horror film, In the Place of the Dead, in Morocco and the erotic fantasy Trouser Bar, which premiered at BFI Southbank in March 2016 and caused a furore. Both films received awards internationally.
After re-reading The Wrong People, McGillivray was convinced the time had come for a film of Maugham's gripping thriller. In 2017 he secured the screen rights and wrote a new screenplay, which has received the blessing of both Courtney Burr – "I enjoyed your script very much. I found the characters clear, distinctive and true to my memory of the book" – and Robin Maugham's former partner William Lawrence.
Robin Maugham wrote The Wrong People based on his own experiences, both in the UK and Morocco.
Robin Maugham in 1974 (Photo by Allan Warren)
Robin Maugham
Robin Maugham (1916-1981) is known throughout the world for his novel The Servant (1948). In 1963 it was adapted into a celebrated British film, directed by Joseph Losey and written by Harold Pinter, and later included in the British Film Institute's Top 100 British Films. A stage version premiered in 1958 and is still on tour throughout Europe.
Maugham wrote several other novels, some of which were also filmed. When he showed the manuscript of The Wrong People to his uncle, Somerset Maugham, the great man declared "that it was the first novel for years that he had been obliged to read straight through at one sitting." Many subsequent readers, including producer-writer David McGillivray, also have found it impossible to put the book down.
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Tagged as Courtney Burr, David McGillivray, David Sherwin, Edna O'Brien, Frightmare, gay, homosexuality, House of Whipcord, In the Place of the Dead, John Moulder Brown, Leonard Whiting, Martin Potter, Morocco, movies, Murray Smith, Pete Walker, Peter Shaffer, pitch, Robin Maugham, Sal Mineo, scripts, Somerset Maugham, Tangier, The Servant, The Wrong People, Trouser Bar, William Lawrence
Jul 15, 2017 · 6:36 pm
How to edit your script and not be invisible at the Edinburgh Fringe (etc)
To be pompous… and, if I can't be pompous here, then where can I be?…
If you fancy yourself as a wordsmith on stage or screen, my advice is to write as little dialogue as possible.
If your work of genius would work as well on radio as it would on stage or screen, then it needs visuals added.
Television is not radio.
Movies are not radio.
The stage is not radio.
That's a big thing of mine.
If a script will work on radio, then it is probably a bad script for stage or TV/movie production.
Having said that, Johnny Speight and a lot of Galton & Simpson TV shows are all dialogue….
So what do I know?
One Foot in the Grave, though, has loads of visual gags. There's a gag where the phone rings and Victor, asleep on a chair, sleepy, reaches down and picks up a small dog.
The tortoise episode has visual gags aplenty. There are loads of surreal visuals in Grave which don't rely on spoken words.
And, of course, allegedly the British public's most beloved and memorable TV comedy sequence is not Ronnie Barker's "four candles" routine nor John Cleese's 'dead parrot' routine but the visual gag from Only Fools and Horses.
Just because something ain't got spoken words doesn't mean it ain't a good piece of scripting.
Clint Eastwood says he told Sergio Leone to cut acres of his character's dialogue out of the original script of A Fistful of Dollars. He told Sergio: "I can do those two lines of dialogue by just one look".
The 2mins 40secs pre-credits opening of Sergio Leone's Once Upon a Time in The West is brilliantly scripted but has only three short, totally inconsequential lines of dialogue.
So write a stage or screen script.
Then go through it and try to cut out as many words as you can because, if you can, they are unnecessary.
Then go through it again and try to cut out as many of the necessary words as you can and replace them with something visual.
If words can be cut out and the point made visually, that's miles better – though, if it's for a stage performance, the people at the back have to see it. So subtle eye movements may be invisible.
And I get SO annoyed when performers sit or lie on the floor in venues bigger than the ones they are used to.
It may have worked in some room above a pub with an audience of 5 but it don't feckin' work when you are sitting in the audience at the back of a non-tiered room with even only three rows of people seated in front of you. If the performer's head is below the heads of the people sitting in the front row then the odds are that even the person sitting in row 4 can't see it clearly if at all.
End of pomposity. Raises eyebrow. Slaps forehead. Says nothing.
Tagged as Clint Eastwood, comedy, editing, Galton & Simpson, Johnny Speight, movies, One Foot in the Grave, scripts, Sergio Leone, TV, writing