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Title: Poorly Written book
Review: This is a very poorly written book; for example, a sentence on page 63 says: "Once my opponent's leg is passed, I will shift my body toward my opponent's head in order to secure a better hold." Revising it yields: Once my opponent's leg is passed, I shift my body toward his head securing a better hold. Mr Simco repeatedly uses a passive voice and unnecessarily repeats subject phrases when simple pronouns will work; the cumulative effect of so many dead words is a very cluttered book that would have been much better if well edited. I have the sense reading it that the author knows far more about martial art than the art of writing.
