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Title: He needs an editor . . .
Review: . . . not a thesaurus. In the first few pages, I wanted to duck to avoid uninteresting flying adjectives. And you can't use the word "stuff" in a fantasy novel. And fantasy characters get sick. They do not throw up.I'm excited about the fact that this book was written by a teenager, but I don't think we should ignore the rules of style and usage (and plot) just because he's 19. There are some mature ideas in the book (e.g., Eragon's discovery of his own mortality), and some of the passages obviously thought-out (good description of a battle scene -- not easy to do), but the characters'actions are inexplicable (people show up in places with no explanation of why they are there; characters express strong emotions or sarcasm that has no connection to the content of a conversation) and the language is . . . what a 15 year old thinks a fantasy character would say. In general, the writing is distractingly unsophisticated.
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