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Title: Nothing. Happens.
Review: The dialog is good, some of the characteriziation is good but in order to make a story stand out you need... a story. Martians invade, Quartermain and Miss harker go out of town and with no resistance pick up a box. Hyde fights for 3 panels. The end. The characters aren't DOING enough and excpet for Hyde aren't even remotely clever or engaging. One of your characters is a super genius, one is a superb tactician.. have them at least TRY something more brilliant than blow up the bridge and wait.
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