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Title: Over the Top, Indeed!
Review: While I applaud Mr. David in his effort, it's clear he is a developing writer. This story could have benefited a great deal more from more effective editing; some of the oversights are unforgivable.The characters were colorful and interesting, but there was not a clear sense of time or place as the story unfolded, which was confusing and frustrating.The sense of internal conflict that Jared was experiencing that led to the murder-suicide seemed extraneous and a bit far-fetched, giving the story a loopy, unbalanced quality.I'll look forward to his next work to see his progress.Michael Sainte-Andress
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