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Title: Needs another edit
Review: Wow. I can't believe this novel not only got past an agent (assuming she has one and didn't self publish) but also an editor. The writing was horrible and amatuerish. For example: "I walked into my dark apartment and turned on all the lights. I checked my answering machine--no messages. I flopped down on the couch and tried to tickle the elmo doll that now lived with me instead of my niece Ashley....That's when I decided. Karma be damned." (shouldn't it be: That's when I decided--Karma be damned?)This is high school writing. My apologies if this is aimed at young adults, but I don't think it is. The story itself isn't that bad, but there is no character depth. Granted, most chick lit is neurotic and shallow, but this didn't even scratch that surface. Maybe the author needs to learn how to develop a voice by not using the first person. Too many "I"s is not a good thing. Unfortunately, I don't have anything good to say about this book. I didn't HATE it, but didn't like it.
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