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Review title: No continuity in the plot
Product review: Like a lot of people said, this book started off with a lot of promise. The premise to the story is very promising, but after the first couple of chapters, it goes downhill. The author does way too much editorializing and moralizing in the story. After David gives up his daughter, every single event, even if he burned his pancakes, is because of the "decision he made all those years ago." I don't buy it. There needs to be a clearer connection between the events in his life and the choice he made. Many of the characters have no relevance to the plot, and if anything, interfere with it. This seems like a story that is written stream of conscious with no connection from the previous event to the next, and then no editing is done to create a seamlessness in the storyline. There are so many seams in this plot, I thought I was inside of a shirt.
