Title: Yes, PLEASE hire an editor!
Product review: MoneyXXX is absolutely correct, the fractured syntax and grammar errors are VERY distracting and jarring. Some aspects of the story are refreshing: the protagonist has a loving relationship with his wife and parents. When is the last time you saw that in a novel? However, the characters all speak in the same "voice", that is, they all use the same slang and the same sentence structures. Dick Francis is a good example of an author who distinguishes his characters with dialog. There are lot of glaring grammatical errors. There are also several minor plot errors: eg, a character showing up in a different place than he was minutes before. This book really needs polishing before it's ready for the general public, but I think this guy has a future as a writer. This book's plot was a refreshing change of pace.
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