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Title: Unmitigated firewood
Review: Frankly after 'Freehold' I expected better.Remove 50 pages of 'I too can do PT' (its boring, pointless and unsurprising)Remove @50 pages of waffle in the middle (adds very little to the story)Remove 20 pages of character angst at the end (quite out of character)Decide whether its written as a diary, as a debrief, or as a history. (it wanders)Insert something about the methods/tactics/concepts used to bring Earth down. ( hey, what did the reader expect to buy here?)Decide whether the protagonist is being portrayed as psychotic or as being a `hero in a hard place'End up with a a better story.The only mitigation I can see is that psychotic characters can't be expected to be competent account writers on top of all their other perfections. Which is not an excuse for the real world writer!Recommendation? Go buy 'Freehold' and leave this mess to Baen...
