Title: The only thing worse than vogan poetry...
Product review: has officially been written.Cut the prologue. (You're just setting up a false climax that your heroine is unconscious for anyway).On page 5: "It ws to Forks that I now exiled myself--an action that I took with great horror. I detested Forks." Okay, first, you don't "exile yourself" you either "go" or you "are exiled by others."Understand, the basic stupidity of this sentence, please.
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