Hi, can you help me rewrite this email and make it more professional?

To: Bob Pope
From: Gabrielle Mendes
Subject: Job?
Hey Bob, We talked a couple weeks back at the chamber of commerce event. (I was the one looking for a
summer internship and had a zit on my lip that could have passed for a cold soar. Lol. Whew. It was not.
You’re probably like, “uh.. What?” Maybe that helps you recall, maybe not. Not completely important, I
suppose.
I’d really like to come work for you at your IT business. You seemed like a cool person to work for, I liked ur
striped pants. I’m available to start working on Monday, but I am taking my driver’s test in June and have to
study and go an hour and half away to take it at an easier place cause I’m not a great driver so I’ll miss a few
days. I am also going to the beach with friends for a week in July. Oh, and my grandmother has bad gas
(OMG IT’S TERRIBLE) and sometimes I have to take her to the doctor.
I’ve attached my resume, it’s the bomb dot com. Let me know if you have a job opening for me. I can’t wait
to play on some computers. If I don’t respond to your email, I’m always on FB, snapchat or insta!
Peace out,
Gabrielle Mendes
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Sure, I'd be happy to help you rephrase that. Here's a more professional version of the email:

Subject: Inquiry Regarding Job Opportunities

Dear Mr. Pope,

I hope this message finds you well. I had the pleasure of meeting you a few weeks ago at the Chamber of Commerce event. I was the individual inquiring about potential summer internships. During our conversation, I mentioned that I had a spot on my lip that could have been mistaken for a cold sore, but I assure you it was not.

I'm writing to express my interest in the possibility of joining your esteemed IT business. During our chat, I impressed with your professional demeanor, and I particularly enjoyed your unique footwear choice, which I recall being striped.

My availability to start working is Monday. However, I must inform you that I am scheduled to take my driver's test in June, which may result in me needing to miss a few days. Additionally, I'm intending to travel to a nearby location to tackle the exam as it is easier there, owing to my mediocre driving aptitude. Further, I will be taking my grandmother, who has a severe gas problem (OMG! It's awful!). Occasionally, I may be required to escort her to medical care. I've attached my professional CV for your consideration. I'm eagerly anticipating your response, letting me know if any job openings have arisen. Please feel free to contact me if I overlooked your email, as I'm very active on Facebook, Snapchat, or Instagram.

Thank you for taking the time to consider my application.

Sincerely,

Gabrielle Mendes.
assistant
Hi, can you help me rewrite this email and make it more professional?

To: Bob Pope
From: Gabrielle Mendes
Subject: Job?
Hey Bob, We talked a couple weeks back at the chamber of commerce event. (I was the one looking for a
summer internship and had a zit on my lip that could have passed for a cold soar. Lol. Whew. It was not.
You’re probably like, “uh.. What?” Maybe that helps you recall, maybe not. Not completely important, I
suppose.
I’d really like to come work for you at your IT business. You seemed like a cool person to work for, I liked ur
striped pants. I’m available to start working on Monday, but I am taking my driver’s test in June and have to
study and go an hour and half away to take it at an easier place cause I’m not a great driver so I’ll miss a few
days. I am also going to the beach with friends for a week in July. Oh, and my grandmother has bad gas
(OMG IT’S TERRIBLE) and sometimes I have to take her to the doctor.
I’ve attached my resume, it’s the bomb dot com. Let me know if you have a job opening for me. I can’t wait
to play on some computers. If I don’t respond to your email, I’m always on FB, snapchat or insta!
Peace out,
Gabrielle Mendes
user
To: Bob Pope
From: Gabrielle Mendes
Subject: Inquiry Regarding Summer Internship Opportunity

Dear Mr. Pope,

I hope this message finds you well. We had the pleasure of meeting a few weeks ago at the Chamber of Commerce event. I was the individual who expressed interest in a summer internship opportunity.

I am writing to express my keen interest in joining your esteemed IT business for the summer. Our conversation left a lasting impression on me, and I was particularly drawn to your professional demeanor and the unique style you bring to your work.

I am available to commence work from Monday onwards. However, I would like to inform you in advance about a few commitments I have in the coming months. In June, I will be taking my driver's test, which may require me to take a few days off. Additionally, I have a pre-planned trip with friends for a week in July. Lastly, there may be occasional instances where I need to accompany my grandmother to her doctor's appointments.

I have attached my resume for your consideration. I am confident that my skills and passion for IT make me a strong candidate for this internship. I am eager to contribute to your team and learn from your expertise.

If you have any questions or require further information, please feel free to contact me via email. I am also available on Facebook, Snapchat, and Instagram if that is more convenient for you.

Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to the possibility of working with you.

Best regards,
Gabrielle Mendes
assistant