Ask HN: My take on an science fiction short story
Hello, I've started a science fiction short story that I have not finished yet. Before today, I intended to finish and then share, but because I'm a lazy bastard who likes to leave personal projects behind to work on some newer shiny thing, I decided to share before I finish. So I^Hwe can finish it before i dump it for the eternal eternity.<p>I'm not a native English speaker, so this is really hard on me. Please be kind and constructive. I would really like to have your opinions and refactor if needed. And be very glad to finish this story with your help. I started working on the story on etherpad so you can see its morph from zero to this stage. Also this gives us the chance to collaborate on the story.<p>Story's name is "The Last Chance", but may not be the last name.
Story's plot is: The Sun has came to an unpredicted end. It shows some weird temperature increases and turns out it's going to explode into a supernova. It has it's time but earth is not viable as habitable for our kind. Humans have evolved politically, todays states descended and there is now no state. But order is policed by UN Council having counselors elected by continents. Human beings are turned into two classes, upper and lower. The Council has some concerns about the sun and having a hidden agenda of habitating on other planets before earth is no more leaving lower classes to their deaths.<p>There is a new religious group called Gaians who believes they are part of The Earth and should die with it.<p>My Intentions for the story was, to work on "struggles of human beings, whereabouts of a dooms day" and "the religious irrationality".
Seems like I'm not yet there.<p>http://etherpad.com/ep/pad/view/ro.Ewn6BELOoOh/latest