Room 6 2018 @ St Patrick's School: The Wonderful Orchestra!
We went in the bus to the Aotea Centre to listen to the orchestra. I saw some buildings and some train tracks out of the window of the bus. I was feeling happy and excited on the bus.
When we got to the Aotea Centre we walked up stairs with our partners. We sat down on the seat. The orchestra used the instruments to make music. They made beautiful sounds with the instruments. Everybody clapped because the music was beautiful.
We got the bus, back to school.
This is a fantastic piece of writing about attending the wonderful Orchestra. I really like how you've set your writing out with great paragraphs and written really descriptively using fantastic language. I like how you used words like 'beautiful' to describe the sounds and when you wrote that everyone clapped because it was beautiful, that made me think that it must have been a very special performance.
What was your favourite instrument?