I get 100 off that? Unless it's already post edit.
It brought to mind a harmless and slightly ditzy old lady. Till you reminded me of pantomime at least. In the former the last line sounded a little disjointed, in light of it it hangs together better i think.
For better or worse, it actually does. How easy I am led.
This may just be me, but i felt really really sorry for the frog. I liked it though.
I enjoyed Spidersong (actually I enjoyed all of them, but especially Spidersong), although did anyone else get the impression these kids were simply being farmed rather than sharing a deeper connection with the spiders? Perhaps I'm just anti-spider.
GreatNorthernTroll wrote: Too many cats, not enough toys. The couch is in shreds, the carpet's destroyed. Clothing's abraded. I fear I'll be next!
This seems almost like a wee ditty. Every time I read it I want to insert and in the second sentence to keep the meter.
This made me laugh. Well written.
GreatNorthernTroll wrote: Having burped, the baby felt better. It's serrated fangs retracted, it's eyes shut, and it slept amid the gory bedding.
But possessive its has no apostrophe I like it.
I hosted the Cult of Dagon meeting this week. Unfortunately the sashimi snacks my wife prepared didn't go down too well.