Today my grade went to Ellis island! We had to get to school at 7:00am. The bus ride was about 1 and a half hours. When we arrived our grade went through security. Then rode a ferry to the island. After we ate snack we explored the lobby and had a tour guide talk to us about the experience at Ellis Island. After we looked at some exhibits, we watched a movie. It was pretty interesting. Later in the afternoon before we were going to leave we went to look for family members that might have pasted through. Finally we took the ferry past he Statue of Liberty and went to the buses.
First you called ferry a fairy and you wrote The bus ride was about 1 and a half hours but i liked how you explained step by step clearly like for example The bus ride was about 1 and a half hours. When we arrived our grade went through security. Then rode a fairy(ferry) to the the island. GREAT JOB!
Very good! I like how you explained everything in order. Keep up the good work.
I like how you listed all the things we went through in the right order. It was very easy to understand. The only thing you could do to make it better is add a little more detail to the things we did. Good Job!
I like how you added the little details (how long the bus was, etc.) and I also like how you talked about everything you did and you didn’t just focus on one part.